Conversation Cut Short

In response to Today’s Prompt in Writing 101: Write a post based on the contrast between two things — whether people, objects, emotions, places, or something else. Today’s twist: write your post in the form of a dialogue.

I wrote this as both fable and poem, with a 7-7-8-8 pattern (for those who are interested, I left the numbers).

Conversation Cut Short

Two young beauties, out to play, 7

Rosie Sue and Daisy Mae. 7

Mothers called, “don’t soil your dresses!” 8

Rosie tossed her short red tresses. 8

Both girls, dressed in shades of green, 7

Faced the sun, began to preen. 7

“My dress is best,” said Rosie Sue. 8

“No, I’m much prettier than you!” 8

Daisy Mae retorted, and 7

Dug her toes into the sand. 7

“Ah, you just wish you could be me,” 8

Rosie Sue sniffed back at Daisy. 8

“You are crazy, Rosie Sue. 7

I’ve no desire to be you. 7

Your hair’s a mess, your nose is long 8

And when you try to sing a song 8

Bees buzz louder, donkeys bray, 7

All the bunnies hop away.” 7

She waved a hand and flounced her skirt  8

And tipped her sunny face, quite pert. 8

“I’d suggest you wear a hat 7

If you keep your hair like that. 7

I think it looks like a rat’s nest—” 8

Rosie cut in, “Give it a rest! 8

Your hair is much worse than mine; 7

I get tired when you whine. 7

You are annoying and you’re mean— 8

Always trying to steal the scene. 8

I don’t even want to play  7

With you out here ev’ry day.” 7

“Well,” said Daisy, “call your mother. 8

Go now, go play with your brother.” 8

Rosie turned away to prance 7

But she never had a chance. 7

With gard’ning shears, so sharp and light, 8

I swooped in fast, cut short their fight. 8

So ended the nasty talk,  7

As my hand grasped each small stalk.  7

And now flowers grace my table;  8

Hear the lesson of this fable.  8


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Posted on April 15, 2015, in Writing is fun, Writing101 and tagged , , , , , , , , , . Bookmark the permalink. 26 Comments.

  1. Wow! creative as well as cute – till the punch at the end!

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  2. This is adorable Casey!!

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  3. I really enjoyed your poem. Great twist. Well done. X

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  4. What a conversation! Lovely! Your poetry is great too 🙂

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  5. Wow, that was a lot of fun!

    Good foreshadowing too, with the names and the descriptions…it all seems so obvious on a second read…the hallmark of a great twist!

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  6. Brilliant. Absolutely brilliant! Loved every line. ❤

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  7. That’s a delightful take on the prompt especially the decapitated flowers!

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  8. That was so great! Did not know the twist til the end either! Well done!!!


  9. Dialogue, that is what I meant.

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  10. This was an awesome conversation read. I have not seen a poem like this in a while.

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  11. This was really fun to read!

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  12. OH my gosh, this is great! I was shocked and laughed at the ending! I truly thought you were talking about 2 little girls!

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    • Hee hee! Glad it worked. I really like a twist (O. Henry is one of my faves) so I’ve been trying to incorporate those. 🙂 I’m happy you like it!


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